Borders- My first try at a one-sentence story

Hungry for the world, she collapsed to the floor when she realized her jeans, made in Indonesia, had traveled farther than she ever would.

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8 responses to “Borders- My first try at a one-sentence story

  1. I actually really love this! Something feels a bit ‘off’ about the structure, but I can’t really place my finger on it ): May just be because I have a passionate hatred for commas!

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  2. A delightful distillation Haylimayli. Very well done.

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  3. I think you did a great job!
    It paints a whole picture. I have trouble keeping my tweets down to the 140 character min- I’m so wordy! You are right on point 🙂

    PS, I did post that emotional poem “Green Tree” I was telling you about, but I’m still not brave enough to share it with the person I wrote it for… Working up to it.

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